Good Tuesday Evening:
I hope everyone is having a productive Tuesday (getting many pages of your script completed). I spoke with Jeff the other day and I wanted to share my thoughts with the members.
Jeff offered his services to our group a couple of months ago (script analysis and proofreading) and though some in the group have taken him up on his offers, I think it bears mentioning again.
I personally had Jeff read my work and he spoke with me on Sunday evening after he had read it. I have gone through the Writers Store in the past (they are a good organization - always been satisfied) but I must say that the service I received from Jeff topped them by a long shot.
With most organizations, like the writers store, they give you a breakdown of your story and some notes as to what works and what doesn't work. They give you a nice graph and at the end they give you a standard industry chart stating they would "Pass, Consider or Recommend" your script (which ultimately means nothing because they do not send your script out to anyone). That is fine, however, as newer writers (writers in general) we need verbal feedback to help us understand what's wrong with our story and how to fix it. It is not enough to write down this doesn't work or that doesn't work, we need someone with experience to help guide us through the process.
That is where Jeff comes in.
He spent two and half hours with me talking about my script and where my characters were not being consistent and where I could improve a comedic scene and make it funnier. He gave me pointers and helped me understand what my script needed in order to make it stronger. In essence I got a story conference with him not just a critique. I do not know any places that offers a true story conference. Even the Writers Store (that offers story conference) doesn't offer a true story conference. When I paid for a story conference through them once (extra $50) I got some guy who didn't read the script and only went off the notes the reader gave him. We skyped and he asked me if I had any questions for him. How do I know what questions to ask if I am lost in the process? I am not knocking the Writers Store (they do a good job), I am only comparing experiences that I received with them with what I received from Jeff.
Now, some of you may say that you do not need his services or you have your own person or place you go to. To each his own. Until you experience what Jeff offers, you won't know what you don't know. For those who are looking to take their writing to another level, give Jeff a shot, he knows what he is talking about. He doesn't offer his services to anyone else - not even his friends. What he told me was that he sees there is a level of commitment in our group that he hasn't seen with other groups. He wants to help us and I think we would be foolish not to take him up on his offer.
So, again, anyone looking to get their work critiqued and improved, email jeff at: [address removed]
I hope we all take advantage of the offer. He does a great job.
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