For those attending this coming Wednesday's meeting I wanted make a request about feedback that would be helpful to me at this stage of the writing, and I wanted to do that in advance of your reading.
This is a revision of the opening of my novel (as yet untitled) and my greatest wish is for the reader to feel sucked in right away and seduced by the story. So I'm interested to know if that's happening for you. If so, why? If not, why?
Also, can you see the people and places being described? If so, where is it most visual? If not, where does the "movie" become muddy?
And last, do you feel invested yet in whether or not the main character achieves what he longs to achieve?
Of course, any other additional thoughts or suggestions will also be welcomed and appreciated!
This is kind of a longish submission (about 6400 words) but I hope you will be entertained. It's actually three short chapters. And for those who have read some of this material before, I promise I'll be moving on from this section of the book after this round! It's posted in the files section as Novel-opening.
Thanks in advance,