Heather I have also posted a variation called readers copy the biggest difference is the approach. Instead of creating a character who is more sociapathic based on my experience I am going for a slightly more realistic story. The biggest change is in the first 2 pages. If you don't mind reading that as well I'd really appreciate it, you don't have to read the whole thing, just the first few pages of the readers copy and see which version you like best.
That is true. Dawn's group is good - my only issue with them is how infrequently they meet. We plan to agree on frequency, date and a time for out meetups by consensus in our first meeting on the 22nd. Hope to see you there and learn more about your work.