AWG Meeting - Critique

  • July 31, 2013 · 7:00 PM
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1) "Ghosts" by Jim

2) "Muffintop" by Allison

3) "Egypt" by Mustafa

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  • Valerie

    Hi William,
    I read the article, and found it interesting. I can understand why the China became a Communist country, instead of embracing Western Democracy. Thanks for the history.

    August 3, 2013

  • Valerie

    Thanks Allison, you have given me an awareness of satire. I can now understand the humor in your work.

    August 1, 2013

  • Allison

    You guys rock. I'm bursting with ideas now.

    August 1, 2013

  • Valerie

    You are welcome Jim.

    August 1, 2013

  • Jim

    Thanks again to everyone who took time to give me a critique!

    1 · August 1, 2013

  • Valerie

    Great discussion about all three articles.

    August 1, 2013

  • William T.

    Excellent, especially the post meetup meetup.

    July 31, 2013

  • Joanna

    I'd love to recommend that those of us who want to comment via email/web do so by contacting the writer directly, rather than using the event comments. You can contact the writer by clicking on their name in the right sidebar and then clicking "send email" on the writer's profile page (directly under their name).

    July 31, 2013

    • Michael K.

      Thanks, Joanna. I agree. LOVE the enthusiasm here, but this is not where we give feedback. We do that in the meetings and via private email. Thanks, all. See you soon.

      July 31, 2013

    • Jim

      On that topic, I'd also advise trying to get there a little early, as parking in Shirlington is notoriously difficult...

      July 31, 2013

  • Valerie

    Allison "Muffintop" is interesting, well written, but it uses the voice of "mommy." I would change the voice, by saying "This is Albie," and proceed from how a child views the belly of mommy. It is well written, but the interjections, would appear to be those for women. I am not sure that a child would be interested in mommies belly.

    July 31, 2013

  • Valerie

    The article "Egypt" is well written, and it outlines the history of the Egyptian people and their quest for freedom. I don't know that they have accomplished it yet, being that they are under military rule. Can you have a Western style Democracy in a Muslim country? The article "Ghost" is also well written, as it kept the suspense going throughout the entire story. I especially like looking up words pertaining to the occult.

    July 31, 2013

  • Sue P.

    Just a comment. I believe Mustafa's piece was excellent, as it was well-written and thoughtful. Haven't read the other two yet, but I will.

    July 31, 2013

    • A former member
      A former member

      I second that but I have no idea where it's going!!!

      July 31, 2013

    • Sue P.

      I know.

      July 31, 2013

  • A former member
    A former member

    I can't open "Egypt"!!

    July 29, 2013

  • Joanna

    Busboys and Poets afterward, per the guest of honor's request. This is Jen's last meeting before she leaves us for Budapest, so let's make it count!

    3 · July 30, 2013

  • A former member
    A former member

    I don't have anything pulled together -- may I come just to see what your group is like? Say hello?

    July 30, 2013

    • Jim

      Chris, no need to pull anything together for this one; we'll spend most of the meeting reviewing previously submitted material.

      July 30, 2013

  • Valerie

    I like the new location meeting at Shirlington Library, as that is my neighborhood.

    1 · July 29, 2013

  • Jim

    Michael, do we have a location for this one yet?

    July 29, 2013

    • Jim

      This one is mine. Normally, the group will do in-person critiques of two or three pieces in an evening, so no posting either of material or of critiques is absolutely necessary. If you do want to have something critiqued in an upcoming session, the best thing to do is to put a copy of the material in the Files section here on this site, and get in touch with Michael to see if he can work you into an upcoming meeting.

      1 · July 29, 2013

    • A former member
      A former member

      Cool man. Hit me up on facebook if you want to talk about writing and stuff. Looking forward to reading your story when I"m free later on today! https://www.facebook.c...­

      July 29, 2013

  • A former member
    A former member

    Argh I'm so pumped for this group, but unfortunately have a prior commitment on this night. Anyhow if anyone wants to get in touch and share writing feel free to contact me!! [masked]

    July 29, 2013

  • Clio L.

    Hi, this is clio. i'm new. looking forward to meeting everybody.

    July 27, 2013

  • Valerie

    Looking forward to meeting the group at the next meeting.

    July 26, 2013

  • sush

    looks awesome, Jim! Hope I can make it :)

    1 · July 25, 2013

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